IMO Yours is much better in this case, it is more direct and clear (although I guess I’m looking for problems in Claude’s output). Yours starts by just giving us what you are trying to say. Then gives us your background succinctly.
Claude’s starts out with this circuitous “While I respect…” failing to drive the point in the interest of being… polite, I guess? But not actually polite because everybody who’s read anything knows that “While I respect” is almost always a preface to calling somebody wrong.
It also makes the argument worse. Yours is unambiguous, and does a better job of describing where your evidence comes from. You clearly describe yourself as doing something that is not exactly art, but it is like art, and so you bring it up as an good example of Claude doing an art-like thing better than a professional.
In the Claude sample, it isn’t clear until the dash what’s going on, which is more than halfway through the comment. What’s your experience? Up until that dash, you could be talking about your experience as a product manager managing artists (at a game studio for example). It’s like “oh, ok, he was just talking about a sort of… not exactly analogy it a less than completely exact experience of working with artists.”
Agreed -- I like mine better, but I (internally) committed to posting before I went to Claude. I think it does better than I do as the content gets longer.
Claude’s starts out with this circuitous “While I respect…” failing to drive the point in the interest of being… polite, I guess? But not actually polite because everybody who’s read anything knows that “While I respect” is almost always a preface to calling somebody wrong.
It also makes the argument worse. Yours is unambiguous, and does a better job of describing where your evidence comes from. You clearly describe yourself as doing something that is not exactly art, but it is like art, and so you bring it up as an good example of Claude doing an art-like thing better than a professional.
In the Claude sample, it isn’t clear until the dash what’s going on, which is more than halfway through the comment. What’s your experience? Up until that dash, you could be talking about your experience as a product manager managing artists (at a game studio for example). It’s like “oh, ok, he was just talking about a sort of… not exactly analogy it a less than completely exact experience of working with artists.”